Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?

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thirty years,

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ownership

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more common in human life.

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situation is causing a lot of

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for

people

such

as huge traffic congestion and air pollution. How true is

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statement and how popularity of

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trend can be reduced? In fact, problems with increasing

car

ownership

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world. To exemplify, some roads are not adapted to heavy congestion of vehicles. Because of

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their job or educational institutions on time.

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, educating

people

for work and economic development Second problem is

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air pollution, which occurs

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cars. Nature and health of

people

are strangling, it becomes unbearable to live in

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places. In my opinion,

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with increasing

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ownership

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transport infrastructure. States should buy more buses and trams and expand the metro system. With

such

reforms, the load on the roads will decrease, and more

people

will switch to public transport which is beneficial for governments.

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, air pollution would decrease rapidly because of these actions. These changes can improve

people

’s safety and quality of life,

while

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greatly benefiting the city’s environment and natural surroundings.

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this

is a fact that the popularity of

car

ownership

has increased dramatically over the

last

thirty years. Unfortunately,

this

has created a lot of problems that need to be solved.

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coherence cohesion

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The topic is tackled from multiple angles, recognizing both the problem and possible solutions.

coherence cohesion

Sentences have a clear sense of direction, enhancing readability.

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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

250 words

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