Transport preference among young people The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Transport preference among young people 

The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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of children who prefer to use 3 particular types of transport
among
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in
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4 nations.
Overall
,
it is clear that
car
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a car
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is by far the most popular transport in all nations,
while
opposite
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the opposite
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is true for
motorcycle
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a motorcycle
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.
Also
, it can be seen that The figure
of
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for
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France
shows identical results,
by
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contrast
of
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others. Looking at the details, Italy's percentage of using bicycle shows as almost similar
as
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to
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the US with about 10 %,
while
In
UK
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the UK
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this
numbers
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is much
more
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bigger than
former
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the former
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ones with
20
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a 20
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%
in
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difference,
whereas
In
France
it stands at about 45 %, which is most preferable transport system in the
France
. Turning to the car, UK and US both
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similar numbers, at 60%, whilst in
France
it displays , quite twice as little as Italy with 40% and 75 % respectively.
Finally
, Motorcycle is in
minority
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the minority
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in
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all across the states, where Three countries stand almost in
one tenth
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one-tenth
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, with
exception
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the exception
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of US people who tend to use motorbikes more often than not
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than
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then
others,
wich
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which
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outweigh them, by 20 %.
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