Transport preference among young people The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates
percentage
of children who prefer to use 3 particular types of transport Add an article
the percentage
among
4 nations. Change preposition
in
Overall
, it is clear that
car
is by far the most popular transport in all nations, Correct article usage
a car
while
opposite
is true for Correct article usage
the opposite
motorcycle
. Correct article usage
a motorcycle
Also
, it can be seen that The figure of
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for
France
shows identical results, by
contrast Change preposition
in
of
others.
Looking at the details, Italy's percentage of using bicycle shows as almost similar Change preposition
to
as
the US with about 10 %, Change preposition
to
while
In UK
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the UK
this
numbers
is much Fix the agreement mistake
number
more
bigger than Change the word
apply
former
ones with Correct article usage
the former
20
% Correct article usage
a 20
in
difference, Change preposition
apply
whereas
In France
it stands at about 45 %, which is most preferable transport system in the France
. Turning to the car, UK and US both shows
similar numbers, at 60%, whilst in Correct subject-verb agreement
show
France
it displays , quite twice as little as Italy with 40% and 75 % respectively. Finally
, Motorcycle is in minority
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the minority
in
all across the states, where Three countries stand almost in Change preposition
apply
one tenth
, with Add a hyphen
one-tenth
exception
of US people who tend to use motorbikes more often than notCorrect article usage
the exception
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than
then
others, wich
outweigh them, by 20 %.Correct your spelling
which
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