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The graph below shows the population figures for different type of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012

The graph below shows the population figures for different type of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012
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The line chart shows the
population
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 of different species of
turtles
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 in India from 1980 to 2012.
Overall
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, Olive Ridley
Turtles
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 received
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a dramatical
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dramatical
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increase
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 in
population
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while
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 Leatherback
turtles
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 and Green
turtles
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 noticed
dwindling
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a dwindling
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 in their
population
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. Olive Ridley
turtles
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 saw a surge in
population
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 over the
years
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. There were only around a hundred of them in 1980 before a steady
increase
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 in
population
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 from around 110 in 1988 to nearly 120 in 1994. There was a sharp
increase
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 in
population
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 from an estimate of 120 to nearly 140 in a span of 4
years
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. Over the following
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years
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years,
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 it noticed sharp ups and downs with increases in 2004 and 2006 and decreases in 2002 and 2008. Leatherback
turtles
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 and green
turtles
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 perceived a decrease in
population
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 over the
years
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. Leatherback
turtles
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 received an
increase
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 in
population
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 from 1984 to 1988 before plummeting from around 110 in 1988 to nearly 80 in 1994. It
continues
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continued
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 to slowly decrease its
population
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 to less than 60 of them in 2012. Green
turtles
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 saw vicious ups and downs in
population
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 before slowly dwindling in number.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, turtles, increase, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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