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The graph below shows the population figures for different type of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012

The graph below shows the population figures for different type of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012
#population #figures #type #turtles #india
The line chart shows the
population
 of different species of
turtles
 in India from 1980 to 2012.
Overall
, Olive Ridley
Turtles
 received
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a dramatical
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dramatical
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dramatic
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increase
 in
population
while
 Leatherback
turtles
 and Green
turtles
 noticed
dwindling
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a dwindling
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 in their
population
. Olive Ridley
turtles
 saw a surge in
population
 over the
years
. There were only around a hundred of them in 1980 before a steady
increase
 in
population
 from around 110 in 1988 to nearly 120 in 1994. There was a sharp
increase
 in
population
 from an estimate of 120 to nearly 140 in a span of 4
years
. Over the following
years
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years,
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 it noticed sharp ups and downs with increases in 2004 and 2006 and decreases in 2002 and 2008. Leatherback
turtles
 and green
turtles
 perceived a decrease in
population
 over the
years
. Leatherback
turtles
 received an
increase
 in
population
 from 1984 to 1988 before plummeting from around 110 in 1988 to nearly 80 in 1994. It
continues
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 to slowly decrease its
population
 to less than 60 of them in 2012. Green
turtles
 saw vicious ups and downs in
population
 before slowly dwindling in number.
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