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The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart depicts 3 distinct
electricity
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 sources (fossil
fuel
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,
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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, and nuclear
power
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) for 4 different countries during the period from 2003 to 2008.
Overall
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, all 4 countries had different preferences for
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 sources throughout the period. To commence, within
such
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 a period, fossil
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 predominated India’s
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 supply, accounting for 82%.
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, the percentage of
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 and nuclear
power
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 that was utilized for
electricity
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 in India remained relatively low at 14% and 4% respectively, indicating a noticeable disparity.
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, in Morocco,
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 was the dominant source of
electricity
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 at 95%,
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 the percentage of fossil
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 for
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 demands was 90% less compared to
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power’s
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, illustrating a tremendous gap.
On the other hand
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, between 2003 and 2008, in Sweden,
hydro
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 and nuclear
power
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 contributed nearly identical percentages for
electricity
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, amounting to roughly 50% on average for each source.
Conversely
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, fossil
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 only produced roughly 40% less than
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 and nuclear
power
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 for Sweden’s
electricity
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 needs.
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, in Vietnam, 56% of the proportion of
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source
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 came from fossil
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,
while
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 the remaining 44% was produced from
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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, presenting a slight gap.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, fuel, hydro, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity generation
  • Energy sources
  • Coal-powered
  • Natural gas
  • Nuclear energy
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Renewable resources
  • Energy mix
  • Clean energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Trend analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Energy transition
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Energy reliance
  • Energy portfolio
  • Year-over-year comparison
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