Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?
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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your essay more clearly by using paragraphs more effectively and ensuring each paragraph contains one main idea.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. This will strengthen your essay and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Clarify your main points and make sure they are related directly to the topic of how laws can impact recycling behaviors.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion that laws could be useful for increasing recycling, and you expressed this perspective with enthusiasm.
task achievement
You emphasize the importance of education and individual responsibility in supporting recycling efforts.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion reflects a hopeful outlook and a call to action, which is effective in engaging the reader.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite