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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the total
percentage
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 of
films
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 released and the total
percentage
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 of tickets
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sales
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sold
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 in 1996 and 2006 in a nation. Substantially,
drama
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films
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 were being produced in the highest level of quantities, but
comedy
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films
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 won the largest
percentage
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 of cinema ticket
sales
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. Romance
films
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 had
least
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the least
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 production in 1996 and 2006, and
least
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the least
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sales
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 in only 2006,
while
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that is
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fantasy
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movie
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movies
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 in 1996 with
lowest
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the lowest
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sales
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. Generally, the order of
percentage
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 of film released is always in
drama
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,
comedy
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,
fantasy
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 and romance. In 2006, the
percentages
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percentage
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 of
film
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films
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 released
were
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was
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 higher than that in 1996, except for romance, which was the same with a number of 6%.
Drama
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 movies increased from 26% to 35%,
comedy
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 movies
has
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were
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 5% higher, and
fantasy
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 movies were being released more from 12% to 16%.
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, the order of
percentage
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 of cinema ticket
sales
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 is a lot different, which is
comedy
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,
drama
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,
fantasy
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 and roman
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, films, sales, drama, comedy, fantasy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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