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You have recently noticed and increase in traffic in your residential area. Write a letter to the responsible person at the local council to inform him about the problem and say - Introduce yourself and describe the problem - What are the reasons for the traffic in your view - Suggest a solution to the problem.

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I am writing
this
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 letter to express my concern
on
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about
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 the rapid growth of
traffic
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 jams in my hometown
from
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in
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last
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the last
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coupls
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couple
couples
 of months. My name is Sim, I
am
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have been
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 residing on
the
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apply
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Hurontario and Eglinton
street
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from
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since
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 two years ago.
This
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 is
a
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the
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 first time we are facing
problem
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a problem
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 with
traffic
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 it never happened before. It is making
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it difficulties
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difficulties
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difficult
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 for old people and
school children
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schoolchildren
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 in my town. The main reason
of
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for
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this
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these
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of
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apply
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jams is
construction
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a construction
the construction
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 which
is
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has
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 never ending
from
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for
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last
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the last
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 six months. We have
complaints
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complained
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 many times to
municipal
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the municipal
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coucil
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council
 for completing it sooner but never got any response. In July,
the
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they
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 left
one
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the
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 road with
constructing
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constructed
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 and started opposite side,
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 they
have
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apply
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removed the
traffic
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 lights. Which is one of the most dangerous things.
Everyday
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 there is a
traffic
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 controller standing on the road to help people but
still
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still,
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 it is not working. School kids have to take buses for their school
everyday
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every day
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 so for that bus have to stop at the centre of
road
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the road
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 and
that
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is leading
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leads
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 to more jams.
As well as
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,the car drivers
donot
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do not
 even stop for pedestrians,
cause
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causing
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 some serious problems in future if construction work
will be
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is
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 not done sooner. I would like to suggest
solution
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a solution
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to
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of
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to
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this
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 problem. By working continuously for one to
week
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a week
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 without any inconvenience construction work can be done by
company
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the company
a company
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 and wherever needed the local community will help in processing. Looking forward to
hear
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hearing your
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 response. Yours faithfully Sim
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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your letter into clear paragraphs, each detailing one main point, to improve coherence.
task achievement
Expand on your suggestions for resolving the traffic issue, providing more details or alternatives.
task achievement
The letter clearly introduces the writer and states the problem.
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The tone of the letter is appropriate for addressing a formal audience.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear closure with a polite sign-off, which is good for overall coherence.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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