Friends have more impact on the academic performance of students than their teachers do. Do you agree or disagree? Use details and examples to support your opinion.

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In the modern
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of education is increasing day by day. Some people believe that academic performance has more impact
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friends
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rather than teachers.
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essay will argue which plays
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role in the academic achievement of
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with, teachers are the best at what they do. They can guide pupils in which direction they have to go to achieve their dreams and goals.
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, educators
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knowledge
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required to teach
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, so they can prepare well for particular
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. They know what is
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to be successful in
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highly competitive world as they are elders.
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, one of the most successful businessmen of India, Laxmi
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said in an interview that his high school teacher was the main reason for their success. Probing ahead,
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can play
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role as they know their
friends
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well, and they can motivate them and
students
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often compete with others.
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, they provide moral support to other pupils in the event of failure.
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, one study shows that 55% of
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help from their
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instead
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of educators.
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, both of the factors have
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own merits and demerits.
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offers guidance based on the
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experience
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provide
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moral support and motivation. In my opinion, I agree with the side of teachers as they have
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and knowledge to help
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increase their academic grades.
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The essay sufficiently addresses the task, offering a reasonable discussion on the impact of teachers and friends on academic performance. However, further elaboration on points could improve clarity.
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Expand on examples and provide more relevant specifics or statistics to strengthen your arguments. This will support your points more convincing.
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The task is addressed directly with a clear opinion stated.
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There is a balanced perspective, acknowledging both teachers and friends' roles.

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