The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at the social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
The provided graph shows how many people
were
participated Unnecessary verb
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for
five types of activities at one social center in Melbourne Australia over a twenty-year Change preposition
in
period
between 2000 and 2020.
Overall
, it is obviously seen that during the analyzed period
this
line graph had upward and downward trends.
Getting back to the details beginning of the period
number of participants who visited table tennis was approximately 17, then
increased gradually by the
2010, Change the article
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end
of the year went up rapidly and reached Correct article usage
The end
at
close to 51 people. Remove the preposition
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By contrast
, visitors of
Amaleur dramatics Change preposition
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were
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significant decrease
and made up 5 by 2020, Replace the word
significantly decreased
whereas
the numbers
of musical performances rose marginally.
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number
However
, the numbers
of participants who visited film clubs and martial arts did not change muchFix the agreement mistake
number
,
but only fluctuated. Remove the comma
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The
beginning and end of the Change preposition
At the
period
visitors of
film clubs and martial arts were in the same numbers:65 and 37 respectively.Change preposition
to
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