Robot and AI are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

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Nowadays, technology is growing at a fast pace.
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and IA are technological breakthroughs that were introduced to the world just recently. With these advancements, there is a possibility that human beings in the workplace will be replaced by these technologies. It is a fact that
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and AI are
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compared to hiring humans which is why many companies are looking forward to
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use of these.
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can be beneficial to businesses, I believe that there are negative impacts that
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society and
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essay. Many industries nowadays are finding means to cut their expenses
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to make more
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for their businesses. An
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is the hospital industry, a specific
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is Chastaine Hospital in the US, wherein they already started to make use of robots and AI to perform surgeries
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patients. It was reported that they did several successful operations and it was
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disclosed that they gained more
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in utilizing the technologies compared to hiring human surgeons who ask for very high compensation.
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, patients were complaining
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the high hospital bills after being treated.
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the use of advanced
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to business entities, it can create a burden to consumers. One
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the high hospital bill after each operation, it is unknown whether patients can keep up
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or if insurance companies can cover
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the expenses. Another drawback is
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the efficiency of the robots and AI. Unless there are frequent updates and
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maintenance
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software
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, errors will be inevitable. An
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a bank in the Philippines wherein deposits of customers were easily hacked because of
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of maintenance. In conclusion,
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and AI will be dominant sooner
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they can promote positive impacts to the world,
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as providing more
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for businesses, we should be aware that the drawbacks are far more harmful since
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can be more expensive for consumers and the efficiency is unknown. It is
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much better to do your own research when deciding to avail of the services of robots and AI.
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task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the task fully. Here, more depth could be added to the discussion on the negative impacts on society, beyond financial implications.
coherence cohesion
The essay could benefit from clearer paragraphing with a topic sentence guiding each paragraph's main idea.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly outlines the main points to be discussed.
task achievement
Specific examples, although needing more detail, were used to illustrate points, which helps to anchor the ideas presented.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • advancements
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • cost savings
  • labor shortages
  • job displacement
  • unemployment
  • social unrest
  • software development
  • robotics maintenance
  • AI system management
  • hazardous environments
  • economic disparities
  • re-skill
  • monotonous
  • labor-intensive
  • intellectual pursuits
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