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The advantages of the spread of English as a global language will continue to outweigh its disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#spread #english #language
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In today’s society, the
English
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 is known as a global
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 which helps
people
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 around the world to communicate more easily and has more benefits than drawbacks. Personally, I am inclined to agree with
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 notion On the one hand, using
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 as a global scale
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 encourages
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 to have
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 understanding regarding something.
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,
people
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 avoided from
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 barrier between individuals, regardless of their cultural backgrounds, and ethnicity.
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, at an international conference,
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 as a main
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. The reason is because
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 is the most common
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 for anyone. To
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, another benefit is
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 can be a gateway for
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 to have higher living standards.
People
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 who learnt
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 as a second
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 and are fluent in
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english
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, generally have
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 to study and work abroad in
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an English
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 country.
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 using
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 for travel,
people
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 can use
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 to get extra benefits for themselves future.
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, two Indonesian engineering students with the same GPA, but student A has
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 level of
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 have a great chance to work in Australia with a higher income than working in Indonesia.
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, even accepting
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 as a general
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, might cause the extinction of some minor languages which are rarely spoken by
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 nowadays.
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 can be a huge loss for human culture and identity. In conclusion,
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 the dominance of
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 influences on some cultures, I firmly believe that the benefits of
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 and the advancement of
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's career
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Enhance coherence and cohesion by ensuring all sentences and ideas flow logically. Use linking words and phrases more consistently to connect your points effectively.
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Clarify any vague statements and make ideas more comprehensive. For example, elaborate on why English as a gateway leads to higher living standards.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your argument effectively.
task achievement
You have addressed both the advantages and disadvantages of English as a global language, which shows a balanced approach to the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global language
  • lingua franca
  • communication
  • employment opportunities
  • economic growth
  • cultural exchange
  • knowledge sharing
  • education
  • travel
  • linguistic diversity
  • cultural imperialism
  • linguistic imperialism
  • colonization
  • identity
  • language preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • mutual understanding
  • intercultural relationships
  • linguistic barriers
  • disadvantaged communities
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