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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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There are plenty of
people
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 who are becoming interested in searching for the
history
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 of the
house
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 they live in. They have their own reasons for that.
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, in my opinion, it is all about the
curiousity
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curiosity
 of human beings. Most
people
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 wonder about the
history
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 of their
house
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. You are about to purchase a fancy
house
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that is
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 just like your dream
house
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. Don't you want to know about the
history
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 of that building? What if there is a
house
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 that looks perfect?
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, the expense of the building is just half compared to what you expected. You might want to know why the expense of
this
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 outstanding
house
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 is too low. Some
people
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 want to know that the crime has
been happened
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 in
this
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house
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, the fire
history
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, or even if there was someone who died in
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 building.
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, some
people
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 have exact reasons why they are trying to search
about
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for
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 their home,
such
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 as the paulteguist effect. Some
people
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 thought their
house
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 was
hunted
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, so they used that sort of circumstance for their
Youtube
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YouTube
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 video to earn some money and interest from
people
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. There are many
people
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 who want to buy a
house
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 or
is
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are
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 already living
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there and have
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 the right to know about the
history
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 of their
house
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. And they are going to love their home more and more
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 they are searching for it.
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, how can they investigate the
history
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 of their
house
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 themselves? They can hear from the former owner of the
house
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, search it on the internet, or invest
the
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in the
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house
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 themselves. Even there are some
people
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 who hire a private investigator
for researching
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to research
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 their
house
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. In conclusion, there are many
people
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 out there who want to find out about the
history
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 of their
house
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 for some
reasons
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.
This
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 is from the
curiousity
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curiosity
 of human beings. They will have some interest and love for their
house
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 more and more
while
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 they are finding out about their home.

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coherence cohesion
Try to enhance the logical flow between ideas, ensuring smoother transitions between paragraphs. This will help the reader follow your arguments more clearly.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to substantiate your points. This could involve concrete instances or anecdotal evidence that illustrate why people are interested in the history of their homes.
task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea that connects back to the essay question, supporting the overall argument. This will enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your response.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a well-structured introduction and conclusion, clearly restating the main topics discussed.
task achievement
The essay addresses both parts of the question, exploring reasons for interest in house histories and ways to research them.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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