You work for a company. You have seen some information online about a training course that would be useful for your work. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter benelicial joork ogive details of the course osay how the course would be useful oexplain how the company could help you do this course.

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Dear

madam

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Madam

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Smith, I hope you are well. I recently came across your

course

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apply

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Acrylic

nail

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Nail

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tehnician

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technician

” which I believe would be highly beneficial for my work. The

course

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apply

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focuses on

learn

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learning

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how to do acrylic nails and modern nail art designs. It runs for 30 days and it’s in-person. I believe

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course

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would help me improve my skills in

nails

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nail

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design,

whichi

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which

are good skills for a stylist. By gaining these new competencies, I would be able to contribute more effectively to

bring

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bringing

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a new profession to the salon where I work and to bring a

total

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new client base. I would appreciate it if you could support me in attending

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course

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and whether you could give me an estimate of how much

this

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will cost. Thank you for considering

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request. I’m confident that the investment in

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training would yield great returns for the company.

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Yours

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Your

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faithfully, Popescu Andreea

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single idea per paragraph

Consider separating different ideas into distinct paragraphs to enhance readability. For example, you can separate the course details, its usefulness, and how the company can support you into different paragraphs.

complete response

Pay attention to spelling and typographical errors, such as 'tehnician' which should be 'technician', and 'whihi' which should be 'which' to improve clarity and professionalism.

complete response

The letter provides a clear explanation of the course and how it would benefit both the employee and the company.

suitable writing tone

The tone of the letter is appropriate and professional, showing respect and courtesy to the manager.

logical structure

The letter contains a clear structure, including an introduction, a body section, and a closing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

156 words

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