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graph of coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in australia

#coffee #tea #habits #five #cities #australia
The graph shows survey results from 5
Australia
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Australian
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 Cities’ inhabitants regarding their habit of purchasing
coffee
 and tea with their drinking habit.
Overall
, in the
last
 4 weeks,
peoples
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people
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 tend to go to café to get their
coffee
 and tea
while
on the other hand
 buying fresh
coffee
 is the least popular. It is found in these cities that the individuals choose to go to café to get their
coffee
 and tea as more than half of the citizens do
this
 practice, with Adelaide
as
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an
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 exception since the proportion
barely
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 under 50%. Meanwhile, buying fresh
coffee
 is the least popular activity as the percentage of the city residents who do
this
 activity never reaches more than 45%, particularly in Brisbane and Adelaide.
In addition
, the graph
shown
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shows
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 that buying instant
coffee
 is more popular as it has
higher
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a higher
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 proportion in every city.
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Introduction/Conclusion
Consider providing a conclusion to summarize the main points of the essay.
Clear/Comprehensive Ideas
Enhance clarity by specifically describing each city individually. This will help in painting a clearer picture of the graph results.
Relevant/Specific Examples
Include specific data points or percentages to support the points about coffee and tea buying habits.
Supported Main Points
The essay clearly identifies the main trends observed in the graph, such as the popularity of going to cafes and the least popularity of buying fresh coffee.
Logical Structure
There is a clear comparison between different trends in purchasing habits, providing a good overview based on the survey results.

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