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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a lette to this friend. In your letter Say why he/she would not enjoy college explain why getting a good job is a good idea for him/her suggest types job that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear Jasmine, I feel so happy that you are thinking for yourself and your
carrier
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career
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 even when you mother of one. Since you asked me whether you should restart your
studise
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study
 in a college or find a
job
 for your professional life. I would suggest you
to
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apply
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try finding a
job
 as it is been so many years
you
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since you
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 went to
the
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apply
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college.
Thus
 it might be difficult to start studying plus you have a baby
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which
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that
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which
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 means you will find it difficult
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to attend
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attend
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to attend
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 classes,
give
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take
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 exams and study. Doing a
job
 will not only help you generate
the
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apply
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money for yourself but
also
 help you go out of
house
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the house
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, interact with new people and make use of your education. Though you have a BA degree
so
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apply
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it is better to find a
job
 in
administrative
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the administrative
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 field.
Moreover
 there
a
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are a
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lot of
job
opening
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openings
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 in
this
 field. It would be great if there is
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a possibilty
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possibilty
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possibility
 of you getting a
job
 in
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the copperate
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copperate
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corporate
cooperate
 field where there is work between 8am to 5pm which would be helpful to manage your house and work properly. I hope my advice can bring some help to you. Regards Simran
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coherence cohesion
Ensure there are clear transitions between points to improve the overall flow.
task achievement
Double-check for small errors in spelling or grammar to maintain clarity, such as 'carrier' instead of 'career' and 'copperate' instead of 'corporate'.
suitable writing tone
The letter includes a friendly and supportive tone throughout, which is appropriate for the task.
complete response
You have provided a clear reason why college might not be the best choice and have suggested a practical alternative with examples.

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