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Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities (for example, helping at home or work). Others believe that children should be free to enjoy their life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, an increasing number of countries are implementing a four-day
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 rather than the traditional five-day profession. Many people need to relax and take long rest from
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, there are both pros and cons when deciding to do
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 is more beneficial than traditional five days and some of the challenges it presents. To commence with, let, 's consider the advantages of four days of
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 and applied. One advantage is that people around the world can be interested and relax from the stress of
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. On the other words, they may spend a lot of time with their families and strengthen their relationship.
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, parents can be closer to their children and take them to picnics and cinema.
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, four days of
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 were more productive than a traditional vacation.
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, implementing modern vacation has disadvantages that should be considered particularly. Some businesses and companies should be open all week
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 as the hospital. In fact, hospitals play a significant role in our lives in serving young and elderly people.
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, patients around the world need medicine and injections.
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, they have a limited time to finish their
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. All things considered, after analysis of both views of advantages and disadvantages. I strongly believe that the advantage exceeds the drawbacks.

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introduction conclusion present
Ensure the introduction clearly states both sides of the argument related to children having responsibilities versus enjoying life.
relevant specific examples
Provide more detailed and specific examples to support your points, particularly for the view opposing the four-day workweek.
clear comprehensive ideas
Expand on reasons why the four-day workweek may be beneficial or problematic with more comprehensive ideas.
complete response
The essay addresses both the pros and cons of a four-day workweek, which is crucial for achieving a balanced discussion.
supported main points
There is an attempt to provide real-life implications, such as spending more time with family and its impact.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Responsibilities
  • Essential life skills
  • Fosters
  • Discipline
  • Shared tasks
  • Mental and emotional development
  • Overburdening
  • Childhood innocence
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Balanced approach
  • Child's capabilities
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