Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer.

Everyone's
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know
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knows
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that gaining experience in our
life
makes
the
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apply
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life
more adventurous and beautiful. But every experience
come
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comes
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with a beautiful lesson for our entire
life
as before we seemed it as difficult. In
this
paragraph
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I
am totally agree
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totally agree
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with
this
statement. I am going to explain my points in
following
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the following
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paragraphs.
Firstly
, related to our
job
applications
as
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apply
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I applied many times for my
job
in my field and
everytime
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every time
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I got
rejections
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rejected
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but I never
loose my
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lost
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hope. In consequence, I
recieved
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received
my
job
offer with
good
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a good
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wage which is the best
job
for my
life
.
For instance
,
In
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a survey conducted by
University
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the University
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Of Manitoba reveals that 70
percent
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per cent
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of students and adults leave their dreams unfulfilled because they never try to make them a reality.
Furthermore
, patience and courage are the two major reasons in
this
life
which
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that
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a person
do
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does
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not have. Every
work
needs patience and the willingness to do that
work
because if we are putting
efforts
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effort
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into that
work
and doing that
work
with enthusiasm it will
definately
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definitely
gives
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give
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us output which we do not expect. To exemplify,
according to
experts, 90
percent
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per cent
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of individuals will not do their
work
with excitement
as a result
they become bored
from
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with
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their regular lives.
To sum up
, hope, patience and courage are the three important factors which
makes
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make
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our
life
beautiful as we do not expect. They are difficult to gain but
we
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if we
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are successful
to have
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in having
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them,
life
will become more
excited
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exciting
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.
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