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There are now millions of cars on the road in most big cities. Pollution from cars is the most big problem that many cities face today. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

One of the biggest environmental problems is pollution from the urban cities caused by millions of
cars
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. I partially agree with
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 statement. It is undeniable that
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 modern technologies are developing day by day and so are
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. Compared to ordinary
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, electric
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 are becoming more popular.
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 why I do not think
air
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 pollution does not only depend on
emissions
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 coming from
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.
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, in some
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 gas
emissions
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 from factories or construction areas pollute the
air
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 more than
car
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emissions
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. Because of these reasons, I do not agree with
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, in some
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 public transport is not still developed so some individuals use their
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 which are not electric. In fact, outdated motors are based on producing much more gas
emissions
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 and it could lead to
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 pollution.
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, if someone uses an old-styled
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instead
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 of an electric
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 or public transport, it will help out to problem by making it more global. As an outcome of these cases, I partially agree with
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 point. In conclusion,
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 we can find the disadvantages of the
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 to
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, it does not really depend on it.
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, it is up to the type of
car
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.

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task achievement
Try to provide a more comprehensive response that covers multiple aspects of the prompt. Consider exploring alternative sources of pollution more deeply and discuss potential solutions.
coherence cohesion
Work on ensuring that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. Use more cohesive devices or linking words to connect your ideas and paragraphs effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay begins with a clear introduction and a statement of partial agreement with the prompt, establishing your stance effectively.
task achievement
You provide clear and comprehensible ideas, particularly in discussing the role of electric and outdated cars in pollution.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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