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You have just read an article in a national newspapaer which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don’t fully agree with this opinion. •Write a letter to the editor of the newspapaer. In your letter •Say which points in the article you agree with •Explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres •Offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of article.

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Vlad and I am writing to you to express my concerns about the article which was recently published in your newspaper. It says that
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all of the towns in our country have
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similar centres. The text you have published touches
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sensible topic about saving the historical parts of our
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settlements
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. Describing the lack of attention
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Furthermore
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 condition, which includes
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 roof and
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 walls, of the former mail post in the
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 of our capital is
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great evidence that the problem really exists.
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, I would like to argue with you about
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 of the centres in our towns. Our city, as a good illustration of my point of view, has a few significant differences from the other.
Firstly
, our central tower which remains from the old castle.
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 is common, but the one in our region was
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 from the white bricks, opposite to the most red-brick buildings.
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 to that, we have a very long and wide central street, which is uncommon
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 to narrow streets in other regions. Regarding my respect
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 your newspaper and the arguments provided to highlight my disagreement with city
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similiarity
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, I would like to invite you to our town and suggest an excursion
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 the most attractive and valuable places. Yours faithfully, Vlad
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single main idea and is well-organized.
task achievement
Develop the points more thoroughly to enhance the depth of your response.
coherence cohesion
You included both a greeting and a closing, which is important for formal letters.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is appropriate for a formal letter to a newspaper editor.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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