In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage?
In some cultures, many times
children
are told that they can achieve anything if they try very hard. The advantages of Use synonyms
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this
Correct determiner usage
these
mesages
are Correct your spelling
messages
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
makes
Correct subject-verb agreement
make
children
hardworking and Use synonyms
increases
their focus. The drawbacks are Correct subject-verb agreement
increase
children
become Use synonyms
daydreamer
, and it affects their Fix the agreement mistake
daydreamers
confidence
.
If Use synonyms
children
are told that anything can be achieved by trying hard, they will become hardworking. They will be encouraged to attain anything through their constant hard Use synonyms
work
and dedication. Use synonyms
Moreover
, trying to achieve Linking Words
any
success through hard Correct quantifier usage
apply
work
allows Use synonyms
children
to increase their focus. They become more focused Use synonyms
to achieve
something and maintain that until they reach their goals. Change preposition
on achieving
For instance
, in Bangladesh, Linking Words
children
are told that if they can achieve high scores in their exams by their hard Use synonyms
work
, they will get rewards. Use synonyms
This
helps them to keep focused until they achieve their goals.
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However
, one of the drawbacks of teaching Linking Words
children
anything can be achieved through hard Use synonyms
work
is Use synonyms
children
become daydreamers. They cannot think practically and cannot set smart goals to achieve. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, Linking Words
children
lose their Use synonyms
confidence
if they are given the message that anything can be achieved by hard Use synonyms
work
. When through hard Use synonyms
work
they cannot achieve that, it affects their Use synonyms
confidence
, and in the Use synonyms
future
they do not want to encounter challenges. Add a comma
future,
For instance
, Linking Words
children
in India, Use synonyms
once
told that they Add a missing verb
were once
can
achieve anything if they Wrong verb form
could
remain
focused. Wrong verb form
remained
Children
believed that but could not achieve that anticipated goal ultimately. That severely affects the Use synonyms
confidence
of Use synonyms
children
.
In conclusion, if Use synonyms
children
are told that they can achieve anything through hard Use synonyms
work
, it makes them hardworking and increases their focus. Use synonyms
However
, it affects their Linking Words
confidence
and makes them daydreamers.Use synonyms
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