The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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people
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traditional
ideas
such
as how to live
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traditional and behave.
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,
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other
people
argue that these
ideas
are not useful for kids and teenagers.
However
, I totally disagree with
this
statement and believe that
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from our grandparents
are
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helpful
to
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our
life
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lives
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. First of all, our grandparents
wants
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to teach us
to
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the good things. So, there are a lot of variants of good things from traditional
ideas
.
Furthermore
, our century has not changed too much to the do not listen advices from old
generations
.
For instance
, we still have
a
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schools and teachers which already
was
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were
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50 years ago. Nowadays still existing
band
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or
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of
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people
with bad behaviour
such
as violence and crime. For
this
people
still
existing
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the same laws and codes. So, at least
old
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the older
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generations
have
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experiences
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about our life and know the solutions
for
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this
.
For instance
, my grandfather's friend was
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a criminal
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. After our meeting, he taught me and explained the disadvantages of crime.
Due to
his stories, I really understood that fact, that there are not exist any advantages of crime.
Moreover
, the traditional
ideas
were not bad. Because
,
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they
was
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used by our older
generations
. The traditional
foods
were always healthy
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our
body
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bodies
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. If we compare
the
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modern
foods
such
as junk
foods
and ice creams with traditional
foods
, it is obvious that traditional
foods
overweight present
foods
in every part of
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.
For instance
, In my country there
a
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lot of traditional
foods
which have a lot of carbohydrates and proteins in their compositions.
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currently popular
foods
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are fully
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fully
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with
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fats and sugars. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account,
mentality
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the mentality
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and upbringing of our grandparents are useful to
out
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our
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behaviour and life, and I easily can say that we should listen
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to advices
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advices
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advice
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from
old
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the older
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generations
.
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task achievement
Clarify your main points and how they relate to the question. For example, make a clear statement about the value of traditional ideas and how they prepare younger generations for modern life. Ensure your essay fully addresses both the traditional and modern perspectives.
coherence cohesion
Focus on organizing your paragraphs more effectively. Each paragraph should begin with a clear topic sentence that outlines the main idea. Ensure ideas flow logically from one to the next with appropriate transitions.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and supports your argument, reinforcing your perspective on the value of traditional ideas.
task achievement
The inclusion of personal examples, such as the story about your grandfather, strengthens your argument and provides concrete support for your views.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional ideas
  • Modern life
  • Younger generations
  • Stability
  • Guidance
  • Foundation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Rigid gender roles
  • Resistance to new technologies
  • Adaptability
  • Innovative solutions
  • Respecting elders
  • Maintaining family bonds
  • Stifle progress
  • Fusion of ideas
  • Outdated values
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