The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
The adults
teaching
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teach
people
to
traditional Change preposition
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ideas
such
as how to live Change preposition
in as
as
traditional and behave. Correct your spelling
a
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,
other Remove the comma
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people
argue that these ideas
are not useful for kids and teenagers. However
, I totally disagree with this
statement and believe that advices
from our grandparents Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
are
helpful Correct subject-verb agreement
is
to
our Change preposition
in
life
.
First of all, our grandparents Fix the agreement mistake
lives
wants
to teach us Change the verb form
want
to
the good things. So, there are a lot of variants of good things from traditional Change preposition
apply
ideas
. Furthermore
, our century has not changed too much to the do not listen advices from old generations
. For instance
, we still have a
schools and teachers which already Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
was
50 years ago. Nowadays still existing Correct subject-verb agreement
were
band
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bands
or
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of
people
with bad behaviour such
as violence and crime. For this
people
still existing
the same laws and codes. So, at least Verb problem
have
old
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the older
generations
have a experiences
about our life and know the solutions Correct the article-noun agreement
experiences
an experience
for
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to
this
. For instance
, my grandfather's friend was criminal
. After our meeting, he taught me and explained the disadvantages of crime. Correct article usage
a criminal
Due to
his stories, I really understood that fact, that there are not exist any advantages of crime.
Moreover
, the traditional ideas
were not bad. Because,
they Remove the comma
apply
was
used by our older Change the verb form
were
generations
. The traditional foods
were always healthy to
our Change preposition
for
body
. If we compare Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
the
modern Correct article usage
apply
foods
such
as junk foods
and ice creams with traditional foods
, it is obvious that traditional foods
overweight present foods
in every part of compare
. Verb problem
the comparison
For instance
, In my country there a
lot of traditional Add a missing verb
are a
foods
which have a lot of carbohydrates and proteins in their compositions. While
,
currently popular Remove the comma
apply
foods
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are fully
fully
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full
with
fats and sugars.
In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account, Change preposition
of
mentality
and upbringing of our grandparents are useful to Correct article usage
the mentality
out
behaviour and life, and I easily can say that we should listen Correct your spelling
our
Change preposition
to advices
advices
from Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
old
Fix the agreement mistake
the older
generations
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task achievement
Clarify your main points and how they relate to the question. For example, make a clear statement about the value of traditional ideas and how they prepare younger generations for modern life. Ensure your essay fully addresses both the traditional and modern perspectives.
coherence cohesion
Focus on organizing your paragraphs more effectively. Each paragraph should begin with a clear topic sentence that outlines the main idea. Ensure ideas flow logically from one to the next with appropriate transitions.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and supports your argument, reinforcing your perspective on the value of traditional ideas.
task achievement
The inclusion of personal examples, such as the story about your grandfather, strengthens your argument and provides concrete support for your views.