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Band 1.5

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

The given maps show the changes in
the
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Grange Park between 1920 and nowadays. It can be seen that the area had significant changes over the period.
Overall
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, the layout has been changed and
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most of the facilities that visitors have visited for decades have been renovated. A fountain which is located in the
center
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 of the park between two entrances in the north by Almond Avenue and in the south by Eldon
street
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 is renovated to Rose
garden
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 with its seats as well. A stage for musicians was relocated to the west and converted
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the
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 Amphitheatre with its rows of seats. In the north-eastern
part
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 Rose
garden
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 and Pond for water plants
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 a cafe and wide children's play area. A glasshouse and seats in the southeast corner were demolished and a water feature with
underground
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 car park
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 constructed.

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task achievement
Provide a clear and comprehensive conclusion to summarize the changes discussed in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas and paragraphs more fluidly.
task achievement
The essay clearly describes the changes in the park layout and facilities from 1920 to today.
coherence cohesion
Paragraphs are well structured and ideas progress logically throughout the essay.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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