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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foregin language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country . Others say that these are not the only reasons ehy somrone should learn a foreign language . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many
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think that learning a different
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language
 is to travel or
work
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foreign
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a foreign
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 country.
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, others believe that these are not the main
reason
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reasons
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 to learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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. In
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 both
topic
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topics
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. In terms of
traveling
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travelling
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 and
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work
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working
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the country we
we
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are looking for we must acquire a particular
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 for ease
to communicate
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of communicating
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 with their native people.
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, we will be unable to talk to people
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who do not understand our native
language
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.
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, my cousin wants to go
Canada
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to Canada
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 and that country's main
language
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 is
English
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,
therefore
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, he must learn how to speak, listen, read, and write properly.
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Although
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, he
have
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 to
give
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 an
English
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 proficiency test called "IELTS GT"
after
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 that if he
pass
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this
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 exam he can go to Canada.
On the other hand
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, those who believe that
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travel and
work
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isn't
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aren't
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 the only
reason
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reasons
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 to learn a new
language
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 as it is nowadays, people are more interested
to learn
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in learning
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 other languages
to read
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than reading
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books
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.
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, most
of
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the
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non-fiction
books
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written
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 in
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English
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the English
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language
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,
hence
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, to read those
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 we must learn
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English
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langauage
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language
.
Moreover
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, most of the teaching
system
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systems
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 are made
with
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in
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English
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, if I want to learn something from
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the internet
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internet
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 I must know
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 to understand
variety
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a variety
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 of courses afterword I can learn so many skills through
this
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language
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 and it's beneficial for me. In conclusion, in
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colorful
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colourful
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 world, there is much to learn and much more to know about,
therefore
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, we must confess that either for
work
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 and travel or reading
books
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 we need to learn a new
language
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 for it,
also
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 there is no evidence that learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 is only for selfish reasons.

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language
Improve grammatical accuracy, as consistent minor errors can affect clarity.
content
Make sure to provide more varied and specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
structure
Clear structure with a defined introduction, body, and conclusion.
content
The essay addresses both sides of the argument effectively.
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