Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their countries. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to change this negative attitude towards international tourism?

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the profit generated, some people think that international tourism
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negative
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effect
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their nation. In
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offer a few
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. First of all, let us consider that foreign tourists
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many negative impacts
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the
country
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they work illegally in the destination
country
using tourist
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and stay longer than they
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. Some travellers
also
like to buy properties and build homes or villas on their behalf even
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are not allowed to do so.
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, many tourists
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not pay attention to
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values of the people.
As a result
, those attitude gives
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disadvantages
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to locals
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in tourism
area
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.
Consequently
,
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would lead to many problems like traffic, pollution, and waste problem. To solve
this
problem, people need local authority interventions.
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example, the government can apply strict working
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& property
rule
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,
thus
tourist
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tourists
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should behave
accordingly
.
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, local
authority
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authorities
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should apply
high
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tax rate for foreigners who want to work or buy properties in their
country
to get more direct benefit from it.
Beside
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the high tax rate, destination
country
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countries
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need to balance
benefit
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given
for
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foreign tourists,
such
as comfortable
holiday
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holidays
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, high security, and
clean
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environment so they still get the profit from tourism.
To sum up
, unfavourable
attitude
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attitudes
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toward international travellers could be minimalised with some serious acts from the government and locals
such
as
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high
tax
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and
apply
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strict
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the strict
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rule
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rules
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for foreign
tourist
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tourists
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  • overcrowding
  • infrastructure
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