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By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilt of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? (AGREE)

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Death
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penalty
 is the subject of significant debate today. Executing murders to
death
 could lead to
guiltness
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guilt
,
hence
, some
people
 believe putting
murderers
for
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in
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 imprisonment would be a better way. In my opinion, I
am not agree
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do not agree
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 with
this
 concept because it may arouse numerous problems.
Firstly
, a lifelong sentence for
murderers
 causes
financial
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a financial
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 burden
of
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on
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society
 and it might result in a
phenamenon
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phenomenon
 of
people
intenting
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intending
to be
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on being
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 imprisoned owing to the life without spending their own money.
For keeping
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Keeping
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 a criminal in
prison
 till their
death
 could cost a substantial amount of money for the government.
As a result
,
people
 need to pay extra for those notorious
murderers
. From the public's perspective,
this
 is a waste of money for keeping these monsters.
Furthermore
, it had happened in reality that some
people
 broke the rules on purpose in order to be imprisoned as they wanted to live freely in
prison
.
Such
 an example demonstrates the drawback of imprisoned punishment for
murderers
.
Additionally
, the
death
penalty
 could deter
people
 from
commiting
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committing
 crimes, which
enhance
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enhances
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 the safety of
society
.
Murderers
 take other
people
's lives, so they should be punished by being taken away their lives too.
Otherwise
, more
people
 will take murder as nothing, resulting in a more chaotic world.
However
,
death
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the death
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penalty
 is
also
 attended by the controversy of morality. Some
people
 believe that executing
death
 is not a proper way, as
murderers
 might have the potential to retrieve their kindness and
can
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be educated to be good.
Also
, some of the murder cases are driven by the mental issue, which is
also
 a controversial topic in
the
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society
. In
coclusion
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conclusion
, I believe the
death
penalty
 has its importance to dissuade
people
 from offending crimes.
On the contrary
, putting
murderers
 in
prison
 could be a burdensome issue weighing in
the
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society
.
As a result
,
ife
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life
 in
prison
 is
a
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not a better punishment for
murderers
.
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task achievement
Clarify your position in the introduction. While you state 'I am not agree,' it's unclear whether you support or oppose the death penalty initially.
task achievement
Develop your points with more specific and relevant examples to better illustrate your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes both an introduction and a conclusion, which helps structure your argument.
task achievement
You address potential counterarguments, such as moral considerations and mental health issues.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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