The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The graph displayed a fluctuation
change
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three important metals in 2014, they are copper,
nickel
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, and zinc. The graph illustrates the up and down of metal
prices
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in
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every month.
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, the
prices
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of these metals turned down until June and
then
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increased in July.
To begin
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,
nickel
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was the one metal with a significant
change
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in
the
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price every month in 2014. it only takes 2 months, after January to May, the
change
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of
nickel
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prices
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dramatically went down from 6% to 1%.
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, it remained stable until June the price dropped again to -3%.
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, it slightly increases to -1% in the next period.
Finally
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, it reached 1%
at the end
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of the year. An opposite trend was different for zinc metal
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. In February, only
this
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metal increases,
while
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others drop.
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, a similar pattern of price changes of zinc was seen to be almost the same with
nickel
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from June until December. an interesting pattern of copper
prices
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shown to be relatively stagnant in
change
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. From the beginning to the end of the year, it stayed approximately at 2%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change, nickel, prices with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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