The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three

metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,

and make comparisons where relevan
The graph displayed a fluctuation
change
of
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three important metals in 2014, they are copper,
nickel
, and zinc. The graph illustrates the up and down of metal
prices
in
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every month.
Overall
, the
prices
of these metals turned down until June and
then
increased in July.
To begin
,
nickel
was the one metal with a significant
change
in
the
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price every month in 2014. it only takes 2 months, after January to May, the
change
of
nickel
prices
dramatically went down from 6% to 1%.
Then
, it remained stable until June the price dropped again to -3%.
However
, it slightly increases to -1% in the next period.
Finally
, it reached 1%
at the end
of the year. An opposite trend was different for zinc metal
prices
. In February, only
this
metal increases,
while
others drop.
However
, a similar pattern of price changes of zinc was seen to be almost the same with
nickel
from June until December. an interesting pattern of copper
prices
shown to be relatively stagnant in
change
. From the beginning to the end of the year, it stayed approximately at 2%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change, nickel, prices with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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