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Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#nowadays #persons #countries
In recent years,
envrionmental
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environmental
 problems are widely recognized as global
issues
 that require international
cooporation
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cooperation
corporation
. In
this
view point
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viewpoint
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, a single person or a certain country is powerless to provide
a meaningful solutions
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meaningful solutions
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 to these matters. I totally agree that environmental
issues
 should be handled by countries around the globe. First and foremost, we have to note that environmental
issues
 will spread and can be found without
border
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borders
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.
For instance
, global warming, which is caused by carbon
emitions
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emissions
,
are
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is
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 our utmost concern. As carbon gas
are
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is
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exhauseted
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exhausted
 from various sources
such
 as cars and factories
on
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in
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any
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many
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places
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place
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 around the world, not only individual efforts but
also
 international law enforcement and regulations to limit the
emition
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emission
 are crucial to mitigate the matter. Another example that
explain
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explains
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 the effectiveness of international
cooporation
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cooperation
 is the case of
protectiong
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protecting
protection
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer. By forbidding the use of harmful
frongas
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fringes
frogs
 globally in
1990s
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the 1990s
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, any manufacturer on
this
 planet
are
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is
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 no longer producing
fridge
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fridges
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 or air
conditioner
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conditioners
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 using
the
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apply
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gas at
the
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apply
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present.
As a result
,
thickness
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the thickness
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 of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer
are
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is
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 now
recoverd
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recovered
 and
the
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apply
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acid rain, once
it
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apply
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used
be
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to be
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 a widespread concern,
became
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has become
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 less common in
this
 21st century.
To conclude
, international
cooporation
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cooperation
 plays a pivotal role in
these kind
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this kind
these kinds
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 of global environmental
issues
.
Although
individulals
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individuals
 and a single country can make positive impacts
to
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on
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 these
issues
, meaningful and crucial
change
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changes
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 can be made when they
handled
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are handled
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 internationally.
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Language Accuracy
Improve grammatical accuracy and fix small spelling errors (e.g., "envrionmental" should be "environmental," "cooporation" should be "cooperation," "emitions" should be "emissions" and "exhauseted" should be "exhausted").
Content Development
Develop main points more thoroughly and clearly explain the connection between examples and the main arguments.
Structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in understanding the writer's viewpoint.
Relevance
Successfully identifies global warming and ozone layer protection as important international environmental issues.

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