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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon . summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon . summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The diagram displayed the life cycle of
salmon
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 in three stages, from eggs to adults.
Otherwise
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, it includes two different places, rivers and the
sea
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.
Overall
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, the pictures presented the first beginning of
salmon
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 life. They started at the upper
river
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, and the lower
river
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, and followed to the
sea
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 where their growth continued. Among both waters,
salmon
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 stayed longer in the open
sea
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.
To begin
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,
salmon
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 eggs were placed in between small stones at the bottom of reeds in the upper
river
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.
This
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 lasts for five to six months before they become a little baby
salmon
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. After that, in the second stage, they moved to fast-flowing waters at the lower
river
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. It is
clearly
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clear
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 that the place was the right location for
they
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them
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 to grow
become
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and become
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 smolt until they
reach
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reached
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 their size approximately in the range of 12 to 15 cm.
However
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, it takes a long period of their life about 4 years.
Following
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this
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, the middle-growing
salmon
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then
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 moved to the open
sea
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 and lived for 5 years as an adult. On average, these adults have a length of 70 to 75 cm. In the final stage, they went back to the
river
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 to mate and produce the eggs.
This
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 occurs for about 5-6 months.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, sea, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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