Some people believe that automation can help positively transform the economy. Others think otherwise, claiming that it may imply serious economic consequences. Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

There is an ongoing debate that machinery can help transform the economy positively.
On the other hand
, some
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people believe
that it may have
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impact on important economic consequences.
The
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Automation
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automation
has the good side
for
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producing faster and cheaper as the consequences
with
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of
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mass
lay off
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layoff
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. I believe
on
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the first statement
where
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that
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automation
can affect the economy positively. Industry 4.0 has become the most important thing especially when it
come
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to
automation
as it can produce faster and cheaper products.
As a result
, a company can produce the
product
and
hence
can export it to another
country
and get financial benefit and give
big
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a big
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amount of taxes to the
country
.
Moreover
, taxes can boost
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the country
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country
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country's
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economy and help the
governments
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government
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to develop infrastructure for its people.
For example
, China which
are
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is
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famoused
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renowned
for its
product
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products
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can provide
american
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American
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company
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companies with
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good
product
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products
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such
as
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the Iphone
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Iphone
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iPhone
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and export their
product
to the USA.
On the other hand
,
these
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automation
can
also
impacting
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impact
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the unemployment rate because of mass
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layoffs
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coming from the factory
due to
the workforce has been replaced with
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mechines
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machines
.
This
can result
to
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lower
tax
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taxes
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from the worker and
impacting
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the revenue gained for the
country
.
However
, the solution for
this
is that the employees need to upgrade their skills from labour
to
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too
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much more
white collar
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white-collar
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skills
such
as
analystics
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analysis
skill
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skills
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so that they
got
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get
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hired for the higher position that cannot replaced by the
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machines
.
For example
, consultancy jobs, including doctors or
lawyer
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lawyers
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, cannot replaced by
the
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apply
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mechines
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machines
and
hence
can absorb more workforce in the industries. In conclusion,
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although
it is viewed that
automation
can
affect
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have
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the
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apply
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serious economic consequences, there are more positive aspects
on
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tax and
hence
can boost the
ecoenomy
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economy
positively for a
country
that already
adopt
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adopted
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the
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apply
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automation
.
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Consider expanding on the examples provided with more detailed explanations to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear and distinct topic sentence to enhance the logical flow from one idea to another.
language
Pay attention to minor grammatical errors and typos to enhance overall clarity.
task achievement
The essay effectively balances both sides of the argument, addressing automation's potential benefits and drawbacks.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the essay's central argument.
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