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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter •say what the participants liked about the hotel •explain why they were unhappy about the food •suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future

Dear Manager, I am writing
this
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leter
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letter
 regarding our company meeting participants
are
Correct pronoun usage
who are
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 unhappy
for
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with
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lunch
Use synonyms
 food.
Firstly
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, I am going to tell
about
Correct pronoun usage
you about
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 your
hotel
Change noun form
hotel's
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advantage
Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
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. hotel location is
beautifull
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beautiful
, beach
shideview
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side view
 is attractive for all our staff. meeting hall
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also
Add a missing verb
is also
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 comfortable
them
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for them
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. they are very happy
for
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about
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 your hotel.
Moreover
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,
hetel
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hotel
brackfast
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breakfast
 it was
vey
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very
 testy and
coold
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could
cool
although
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you
Correct pronoun usage
your
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 are
lunch
Use synonyms
 had some
broblems
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problems
. they complain
with
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to
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 me. that
are
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is
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 you did not provide
alredy
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already
 said some items. and
lunch
Use synonyms
did
Verb problem
was
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 not very
testy
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tasty
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. you have to add some
ingretians
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ingredients
 in
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the futur
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futur
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future
.
although
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 they
adjest
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adjust
 to eat them.
you
Capitalize word
You
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 have to provide you're
lunch
Use synonyms
teastly
Correct your spelling
ghastly
 in
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the futur
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futur
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future
.
Finally
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, I ask you
in
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for
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this
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reson
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reason
 for
lunch
Use synonyms
issuse
Correct your spelling
issues
issue
 you have to
reduse
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reduce
 your food cost. I expect
ypure valuvable
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your valuable
 reply.
Yourfaithfully
Correct your spelling
Yours faithfully
Your faithfully
 Jaam

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task response
Ensure all the points are fully developed and clearly elaborated, especially regarding specific complaints about the lunch food.
coherence cohesion
Improve paragraph organization to ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea.
task response
Use a more formal tone in your letter and correct spelling errors to improve clarity.
task response
You included all the necessary points in your letter: feedback on the hotel's location, comfort, and the issues with the food.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the letter is clear with an introduction, main body, and closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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