The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart demonstrates the way of unemployed people in the UK
spent their
time
last
year.
Overall
, we can see differences between morning and afternoon
as well as
men
's and women
's behaviour.
Firstly
, people were more likely to do housework in the morning rather than in the afternoon
, which was 19% of time
spent for men
,49% for women
in the morning and 7% for men
, 21% for women
in the afternoon
. The last
time
spent for both morning and afternoon
could be seen in drinking which date was 2% for men
's morning, 3% for the afternoon
and women
's both sides 1%.
Moreover
, the biggest difference between men
and women
was the time
spent on gardening, men
spent almost 14% of their time
doing it, but women
spent less than 4% of their time
on gardening.On the other side, women
spent most of their time
doing housework, while
the most important thing for men
was to hunt for jobs.
Besides
this
, the other things between men
and women
were quite equal, like shopping, reading, TV etc.Submitted by chen.allen0912 on
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