The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart demonstrates the way of unemployed people in the UK spent their
time
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last
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year.
Overall
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, we can see differences between morning and
afternoon
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as well as
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men
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's and
women
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's behaviour.
Firstly
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, people were more likely to do housework in the morning rather than in the
afternoon
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, which was 19% of
time
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spent for
men
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,49% for
women
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in the morning and 7% for
men
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, 21% for
women
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in the
afternoon
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. The
last
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time
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spent for both morning and
afternoon
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could be seen in drinking which date was 2% for
men
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's morning, 3% for the
afternoon
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and
women
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's both sides 1%.
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, the biggest difference between
men
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and
women
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was the
time
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spent on gardening,
men
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spent almost 14% of their
time
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doing it, but
women
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spent less than 4% of their
time
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on gardening.On the other side,
women
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spent most of their
time
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doing housework,
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the most important thing for
men
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was to hunt for jobs.
Besides
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this
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, the other things between
men
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and
women
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were quite equal, like shopping, reading, TV etc.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, afternoon, men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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