The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart demonstrates the way of unemployed people in the UK spent their
time
last
year.
Overall
, we can see differences between morning and
afternoon
as well as
men
's and
women
's behaviour.
Firstly
, people were more likely to do housework in the morning rather than in the
afternoon
, which was 19% of
time
spent for
men
,49% for
women
in the morning and 7% for
men
, 21% for
women
in the
afternoon
. The
last
time
spent for both morning and
afternoon
could be seen in drinking which date was 2% for
men
's morning, 3% for the
afternoon
and
women
's both sides 1%.
Moreover
, the biggest difference between
men
and
women
was the
time
spent on gardening,
men
spent almost 14% of their
time
doing it, but
women
spent less than 4% of their
time
on gardening.On the other side,
women
spent most of their
time
doing housework,
while
the most important thing for
men
was to hunt for jobs.
Besides
this
, the other things between
men
and
women
were quite equal, like shopping, reading, TV etc.
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