The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the information about the data of Iranian, Greek and Turkish candidates who
apply
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applied
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at Sheffield University from 2005 to 2000.
Firstly
, in 2005 the students from Greece, Iran and Turkey
were begins
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began
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with 180, 40 and 20 respectively.
Furthermore
, apart from Greek scholars ,
rest
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the rest
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starts
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started
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increasing from 2006 and
take
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took
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a slight pause in the range of around 100 and 60 and ended up with Turkish by 120 and
greeks
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Greeks
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by 180 in 2009.
On the contrary
, Greeks do the quite opposite from other
country
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countries
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citizens , where it holds the top spot in the beginning. But after 2005, a dramatic fall
were
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was
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shown till 2007 with 60 applicants.
Then
it
stabilize
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stabilizes
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throughout the year and again after 2008 it shows a significant decrement and finishes by 40 in 2009.
Overall
, the major trend was up for Iran and Turkey pupils
while
, in
case
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the case
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of
Greek
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Greece
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it is vice versa.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enrolled
  • Enrollments
  • Trend
  • Steady increase
  • Initial increase
  • Decline
  • Sharp increase
  • Peaking
  • Noteworthy comparison
  • Contrasting trends
  • Period
  • Given period
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