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In recent years, air pollution has become a noticeable issue in many cities worldwide. This rise in pollution levels is often linked to the increasing number of vehicles on the roads, among other factors. Discuss the causes of urban air pollution and suggest possible solutions.

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In recent years, many cities have witnessed a troubling rise in air pollution, which has become an increasingly noticeable issue for citizens.
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, among other contributing factors.
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 is the large amount of transport on the
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. Filling
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 with vehicles and other transport leads to realising pollutants, which
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 harmful
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 cities often
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unpleasant like that, because if the
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 with vehicles because in nowadays almost everybody has some kind of transport. The most effective solution for
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, most developed countries like Germany, France, South Korea and Japan
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 quite a large population but they never encountered
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 just because they can build developed regional areas with a lot of
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, the issue of air pollution has become a major environmental concern affecting ecosystems worldwide. By encouraging the correct building of
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 and more
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, it is essential that the authorities should avoid letting in an excessive number of immigrants.
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task achievement
In your second body paragraph, you suggest constructing more cities or additional parts of city areas to address transport-related pollution. Consider expanding more on how this will improve air quality, perhaps by decreasing commuting distances or reducing congestion.
task achievement
Try to enhance the precision of your examples. Mentioning statistics or specific programs that successful countries use to manage urban pollution would strengthen the argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure the logical flow in your essay by consistently linking each cause with a respective solution to maintain structure. Improving transitions between points can enhance coherence.
coherence cohesion
The essay introduces the topic effectively and concludes with a summary that ties back to the main points.
task achievement
You have identified a major cause of urban air pollution in vehicular traffic, which is a relevant and widely recognized issue.
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