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The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different variables are measured in percentages

The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different variables are measured in percentages
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The line
graph
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 illustrates the demographic rates (
birth
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,
inhabitants
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inhabitant
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growth
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 and mortality) between
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the year
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year
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years
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 1940 and 2020 in Scotland. From the line
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graph
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graph,
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 it can be clearly seen
birth
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 and population
growth
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 rates decreased,
while
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 death
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rate
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rates
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 increased during the given time period. Studying the
graph
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 in more detail it can be seen that the
birth
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rate
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 was at its peak,
with
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at
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 2.5
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percent
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per cent
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, in 1940,
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however
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 constantly decreased later. The death
rate
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 was
on
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at
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the
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 highest level
with
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of
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 1.5
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percent
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per cent
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in
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at
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 the beginning of the period and
then
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 steadily decreased till 2010. After that, the mortality
rate
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 elevated, being
approximatelly
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approximately
 0.5
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2020. The population
growth
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rate
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 from 0.8
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1940 dropped to 0.5
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1945
,
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apply
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 but
then
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 rocketed
till
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to
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 1.5
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percent
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per cent
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 in the next ten years. After that,
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growth
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the growth
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rate
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 constantly decreased and there
is
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 no
growth
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 at all since 2004. In conclusion, the line
graph
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 describes that
due to
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decrease
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the decrease
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of
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in
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birth
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rate
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 and
increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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 mortality
rate
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,
the
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apply
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population
growth
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 stopped.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, birth, growth, rate, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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