The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different variables are measured in percentages

The line graph shows the birth rate, population growth rate and death rate from 1940 until 2020 in Scotland. The three different variables are measured in percentages
The line
graph
illustrates the demographic rates (
birth
,
inhabitants
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inhabitant
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growth
and mortality) between
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the year
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year
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years
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1940 and 2020 in Scotland. From the line
graph
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graph,
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it can be clearly seen
birth
and population
growth
rates decreased,
while
death
rate
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rates
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increased during the given time period. Studying the
graph
in more detail it can be seen that the
birth
rate
was at its peak,
with
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2.5
percent
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per cent
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, in 1940,
however
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however,
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constantly decreased later. The death
rate
was
on
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at
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the
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highest level
with
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of
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1.5
percent
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in
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the beginning of the period and
then
steadily decreased till 2010. After that, the mortality
rate
elevated, being
approximatelly
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approximately
0.5
percent
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per cent
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in 2020. The population
growth
rate
from 0.8
percent
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per cent
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in 1940 dropped to 0.5
percent
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per cent
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in 1945
,
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but
then
rocketed
till
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to
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1.5
percent
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per cent
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in the next ten years. After that,
growth
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the growth
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rate
constantly decreased and there
is
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has been
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no
growth
at all since 2004. In conclusion, the line
graph
describes that
due to
decrease
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the decrease
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of
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birth
rate
and
increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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mortality
rate
,
the
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population
growth
stopped.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, birth, growth, rate, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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