some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is good thing. others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each others. discuss both views and give you own opinion

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some individuals assert that rivalry in an academic or a professional atmosphere is beneficial , some would argue that collaboration should be prioritised over

competion agains

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competition against

each other . I hold the position that a healthy

copetitive

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competitive

environment potentially

increase

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the employee’s productivity and students’ knowledge . On the one hand, competing in both schools or companies encourages individuals to thrive and improve one’s personal abilities , contributing to more efficiency. Considering financial incentives for

perssonel

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personal

personnel

make

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makes

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them motivated

performing

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better in their workplace in order to be promoted or

acheive

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achieve

bonus

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.

Additionally

, it would be similar for students since competition

serve

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as a tool for motivating children to actively engage in class activities , which

enhance

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their

understading

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understanding

.

For instance

, In European countries , new teaching methods are implemented

such

as holding some

readin

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reading

or musical

competions

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competitions

even in their extra curriculum to develop and nurture their talents.

On the other hand

, it is argued that competition could stimulate

the

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sence

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sense

of jealousy , resulting

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law-breaking and

reduction

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of ethical values.

While

individuals are striving to

overpreform

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overperform

over preform

their peer group they are more likely to violate other’s privacy and

right

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rights

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with the aim of

wining

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winning

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a rivalry.

This

would create an unfriendly ambience which

lead

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to developing negative features in a person. To clarify my point , some people tend to fail

building

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a positive

relation

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relationship

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with their

coleague

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colleague

colleagues

while

they are competing with each other for a promotion , so

that

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apply

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They might rat on each other or gossip about their personal

life

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to tarnish their

reputaion

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reputation

.

To conclude

,

Although

competition could have adverse effects , as far as

i

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am concerned it not only benefits teenagers to improve their skills and knowledge but

also

enhance

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enhances

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work

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the work

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population’s productivity.