The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line chart illustrates the number of participants in five different activities in 20 years.

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research was done in one social centre in Melbourne, Australia. At first glance, it seems there were no more than 70 persons in all groups.

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the film club had the most significant proportion of all these ages, which was around between 60 to 70.

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musical performances and table tennis increased dramatically in duration.

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, until 2005 there were no participants in musical performances

nevertheless

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, there was a growth from 0 to 20 in 15 years.

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, table tennis steadily exchanged in the first decade, but it has more than 30 people changed which was a lot in 10 ages. Amateur dramatics was the only group which had fallen approximately 30 participants over the period.

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but not least, martial arts had small fluctuations like film clubs between 30 to 40 people from 2000 to 2020.

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, the people who did all five different activities are demonstrated on the diagram. There were remarkable changes in two of them

in addition

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the other 2 activities had no special change

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the other one had a light drop during these 2 decades.

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participation rates
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