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Many people think that it would be beneficial to establish a single, global currency to make international trade and travel much easier. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Would a single currency cause any problems?

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It is claimed that considering a single international
currency
 would benefit
businesses
 and
travel
 easier. I agree with
this
 view that
this
 single
currency
 could be
usful
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useful
 despite the possible drawbacks
such
 as
different
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its different
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value
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values
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of
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apply
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it
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apply
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in various
counties
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countries
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 and harder
situation
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situations
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 for
government
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the government
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 to control the
currency
. Those who
are agree
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agree
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 with the single
currency
 believe that
travelers
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travellers
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 do not need to struggle with exchanging their money.
Noadays
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Nowadays
, those who
travel
 to other countries should change their
currency
 in order to buy tickets or shopping,
however
, with the global
currency
 their time
do
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is
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 not
waste
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wasted
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for
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on
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 exchanging.
For instance
, when
Iranian
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Iranians
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travel
 to
the
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apply
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Europe they
sould
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should
could
 consider buying
Euro
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euros
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.
Furthermore
,
certain
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a certain
the certain
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 number of
businesses
 which should work internationally can directly do their payments from all around the world.
For example
, people from
china
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China
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 could buy cars from Tesla directly without exchanging money. Despite the fact that the single
currency
 could be beneficial, there are still
afew
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a few
 disadvantages that
shoud
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should
 be considered.
Size
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The size
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 of the economy in every
county
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country
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 is different and associated
to
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with
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 various factors
such
 as
productivity
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the productivity
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 of the country,
therefore
, the distribution of
this
currency
 could not be equal for all the world.
This
 unequal distribution does not solve the problem of financial
uniquality
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inequality
.
Moreover
, establishing
the
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a
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 global
currency
 can bankrupt many
organization
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organizations
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 and
businesses
 related to the national currencies
such
 as exchanges. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the view that allocating a single
currency
 can make
travel
 easier for those who
travel
 abroad,
also
,
businesses
 can have
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to trade directly and save time.
However
, it should be considered that despite numerous positive
point
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points
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 there are drawbacks
such
 as disagreements in
distribution
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the distribution
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 of
this
currency
 among
counties
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countries
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 and
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the close
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close
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closure
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 of some companies.
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task achievement
The essay successfully addresses the question by discussing both the potential benefits and drawbacks of having a single global currency. Make sure to clearly organize your points for better clarity and ensure that every argument is supported with strong evidence.
coherence cohesion
The ideas in the essay are logically sequenced, but adding transitional words can improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. Work on structuring paragraphs around single ideas for even clearer communication.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-defined, presenting a clear stance and summarizing the discussed points effectively.
task achievement
Main points are generally supported through relevant examples and explanations, such as the case of Iranian travelers and Tesla buyers, which helps in illustrating the arguments.

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