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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntaryl unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter • explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum • describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful • give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear sir, I am inscribing
this
 missive to apply for the part-time job of a guide in
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the museuem
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museuem
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museum
museums
, as I am free because of my summer vacation. I would like to join
museum
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the museum
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, as
i
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 am free in my summer
vacations
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 and it would be
good
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a good
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 opportunity for me to learn new things and to meet new people. I have very good
communicating
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 skills with
the
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apply
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visitors, I have
volunteer
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for
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college
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a college
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 guide in
student
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the student
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 union.
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, I
also
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 well aware of the history of
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the
artifacts
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artefacts
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 in the museum, which makes me
suitable
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a suitable
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 candidate for
this
 job. I am
avaliable
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available
 for the job in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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for
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on
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 weekdays. I can come in
early
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the early
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 morning,
apart from
this
 my house is
at
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within
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the
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apply
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walking distance from
museum
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the museum
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. I hope to hear
positive
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a positive
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 response from
as
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 soon as possible. Yours Faithfully, Simranjot Kaur
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coherence cohesion
Try to structure your letter so each paragraph has a single, clear focus.
task achievement
Check for small typos and grammatical errors to enhance clarity.
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This letter is polite and respectful, which suits the formal task.
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The purpose of the letter is clearly communicated.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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