IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You live in a house opposite a park. Every day a man brings large dogs to the park and lets them run free. Write a letter to your local council complaining about the danger. In your letter say where the park is, say how often this happens give a description of the man and the dogs.

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Dear Sir, I writing
this
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 to see if you would be able to deal with a problem at the
park
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 across the street from where I live. I reside on
Frpnt
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Front
 Street and the
park
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 is Green
Park
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. The
proble
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problem
 is that every day, a young man brings two Dobermans to the
park
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 and
allowing
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allows
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 them to run free, off the leash. Obviously,
this
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 is
the
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a
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 potential threat to the public in the
park
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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 I have not seen the dogs
caused
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cause
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 any injuries, they frighten other children there and cause concern to their parents. I have contacted the police, but they did not take any action, despite the fact that the
sigh
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sign
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 says that dogs must be leashed all the time. The man appears to be in his late 20s,
average
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of average
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 height and
well built
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well-built
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. He usually wears
black
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a black
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 jacket and blue jeans. His dogs are about a meter high, black and brown and
wll
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well
will
 groomed. I hope that you will be able to take care of
this
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 matter. Yours sincerely, Pramod

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complete response
Consider adding more details about the frequency of the incidents, such as specific days or times, to strengthen your response.
logical structure
Try using transition words (e.g., firstly, furthermore) to improve the logical flow and connection between paragraphs.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea; consider separating the description of concerns from the description of the man and his dogs.
greeting and closing
The letter is well-structured with a clear opening, body, and closing, contributing to its overall coherence and cohesion.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is appropriate and respectful, matching the purpose of addressing a formal concern to the local council.
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