The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
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illiteracy
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in different locations. For the
last
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year.
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,
it is clear that
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females suffer more from
illiteracy
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. Especially in South Asia and the Arab States.
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developed countries have the lowest rates among the other. Looking at the information in more detail, 60% of
women
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and 35% of
men
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in South Asia have evaluated that they can not read.
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, in Arab states shows that more than 50% of
women
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and less than 30% of
men
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have
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.
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nearly 48% of
women
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and 30% of
men
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have
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in Sub-saharan Africa.
On the other hand
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, Esat Asia has only 20% females and less than 10% of males who do not know how to read..
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, in Latin
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America,
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the rates between
men
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and
women
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were very close. 12% for females and 10% for males. As for developed countries almost non-
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.
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