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The table below shows the results of a survey of the average number of cars per hour using three suburban roads during working hours in a ten-year pollution monitoring programme.

The table below shows the results of a survey of the average number of cars per hour using three suburban roads during working hours in a ten-year pollution monitoring programme.
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The table represents
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information about how many cars used three suburban roads in a ten-year period pollution monitoring
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programme
,during working hours.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that
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 the results of both Great York Way and Long Lane saw a
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considerable
 upward
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,
while
 the index of
Harper
 Lane had a slight increase over a ten-year period between 1993 and 2002. Another interesting point is that there was a special road issue which had
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the statistics of
Harper
 Line. Looking at the details, as regards Great York Way's data started at 600 in 1993,
then
 there was a slight
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 until 2000,at which point it levelled off at just 900 in 2001 and finished with
this
number
 in 2002 . If we look at Long Lane's
number
 the trend was similar. Starting from 400 in 1993, the figure
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fluctuated until 1997, and reached 700 in 1998.
Thereafter
, every year the
number
 rose significantly
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 and reached
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 peak at 1400 in the
last
 two years.
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contrast, at the
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beginning
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 the index of
Harper
 Line was 82, which was the smallest
number
 among the other three roads.
Then
, despite the
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considerable
 increases until 1998, the
number
 decreased sharply from 915 to 204 in just one year,
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of traffic calming. After that,
statistics
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 of
Harper
 Line saw a tiny
rose
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 in the
last
 two years and finished the trend at 193 in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words harper, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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