Some people say that animals can be used in any way for the benefit of humans. Others say that exploiting animals for human purposes is not acceptable. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are some who believe that
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of
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for human targets is not appropriate and should be banned, I completely disagree with them because
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on
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may maintain human health and prevent many diseases as
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well
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prolong
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lives. Opponents of exploiting
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highlight that
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deserve their own lives without suffering and dying for human needs. These creatures already have paid for the neighbourhood with people.
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,
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were deprived of habitats and food chains were
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destroyed
, so, every year
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50 species have vanished.
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,
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feel pain, and nobody can help them in lite of their voiceless. It is
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fact, that scientists do not
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painkillers in
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on
animals
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, so rats and
rabits
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rabbits
go through terrible
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.
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,
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of
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may
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many human lives.
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is because for testing drags on people, medicines must be
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well-prepared
and safe, which can take
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period of time. Alternatively, raw medical inventions may be injected in rats, significantly decreasing
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overall
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time
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creation
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the creation
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medicaments
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of medicaments
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. As
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example, the effective vaccine against coronavirus was created so fast because scientists
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use
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mice as the objects for trying
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variants of vaccines before they found
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the
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correct one. In conclusion, I firmly believe that scientists may
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animals
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in their
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because it has many benefits
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as
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the creation
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new
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remedies and decreasing of time spent on
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testing
drags
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drugs
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before it will be ready.
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, to ameliorate the concerns of unethical usage of
enimals
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animals
,
personel
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personnel
in laboratories may
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harmless medicaments in
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and broadly give painkillers.
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task achievement
Ensure that all your points are fully elaborated on. There are some spots where further explanation would strengthen the argument.
task achievement
Try to maintain a formal tone throughout the essay. Avoid using informal language like 'drags' instead of 'drugs.'
coherence cohesion
Despite some spelling errors, your essay is well organized. Work on those minor spelling mistakes for clarity.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, presenting the discussion effectively.
task achievement
The use of examples related to vaccines and laboratories was relevant and made the argument more convincing.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • instrumental
  • ethical considerations
  • regulatory frameworks
  • minimize suffering
  • animal welfare
  • conservation programs
  • wildlife sanctuaries
  • exploitation
  • tourism-related activities
  • cultural benefits
  • educational benefits
  • economic benefits
  • physical and mental health
  • plant-based diets
  • synthetic materials
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