Tell me about the most memorable Trip you have ever taken

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My most memorable trip was from the
last
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year I
had
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went to Uttarakhand. It was a bike trip so
basically
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basically,

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our trip
had
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started from Mumbai, we took a
train
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from Mumbai at
night
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. We reached
to
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Mathura early in the morning. In
Mathura
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we explored different locations, ate some good food, went to temples etc, later in the
night
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we had our
train
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for
Dehradun
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. We took our
train
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and
next
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the next

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day in
morning
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the morning

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we reached
Dehradun
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. After getting
down of
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the
train
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in
Dehradun
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we went to our
bike renting
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bike-renting

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shop, picked up our bikes and started our
Journey
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to reach our hostel which was located in
Dehradun
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itself. We had a ride of 50kms and reached
to
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our
hotstel
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hotel
hostel

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,
checked-in
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checked in

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got
freshen
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freshened

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up and had our lunch and later we went
for
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sight-seeing, came back to
hostel
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the hostel

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had some drinks with friends
spent
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and spent

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some quality time and
then
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

we went to sleep as we were
exhuasted
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exhausted

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.
Next
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The next

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day in the morning we got ready and left for our next destination which was Chaupta, almost a
12 hours of
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12-hour

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journey
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. In between
of
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our
12 hours
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12-hour

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journey
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we used to take breaks
in between for using
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to use

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the washrooms and our
meal
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meals

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. We
finally
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

late in the
night
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reached our
location
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and from there we had to do a 600m trek to reach our tents. It was very cold and we were feeling super cold because we had our
journey
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on our bikes. As soon as we reached our tents after
sometime
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some time

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we did a born fire and sat with our drinks for the
night
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. We had a great time with each other. We went back inside our tent to rest and when the sun
rised
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rose
rises

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we were all ready to do back our 600m trek to get out
the
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location
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, explored the
location
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had
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and had

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our breakfast
and
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it was a sunny day so we were all happy because it was very chilled at the
night
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time. Our next destination for Rishikesh again we were going to have 12
hours
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hour's

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journey
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to reach there. We reached our destination late in the evening by 9pm had our dinner on the way and
then
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

we explored the
location
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for
sometime
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some time

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and went back to our hostel. We sat down there and we were embracing our
journey
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.
Next
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morning we were again heading back to
Dehradun
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to drop down our bikes to the renting shop. We had a flight at 5pm so we
then
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

left for the airport. We took our flights came back to Mumbai
reach
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reached

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our home and took
rest
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a rest

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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your essay into clear paragraphs with a structured introduction and conclusion. This will enhance readability.
task achievement
Try to elaborate more on how the trip was memorable to provide deeper insight.
task achievement
You provided many specific examples and details that make the narrative vivid.
coherence cohesion
The essay flows with a chronological narrative, guiding the reader through the events.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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