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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of
water
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 consumption for industrial, agricultural, and domestic purposes in North
America
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, South
America
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,
Europe
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and Southeast
Asia
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. Central
Asia
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, Africa, and Southeast
Asia
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 have the largest significant proportion of
water
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 used, 88%, 84%, and 81%, respectively used for agricultural purposes. Compared to the three areas mentioned above, South
America
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, North
America
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, and
Europe
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 proportionally use less agricultural
water
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, at 71% of its total
water
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 consumption.
Europe
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 and North
America
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 use
water
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 differently. In both these areas, industry consumes approximately half of the
water
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 consumption, at 53% and 48%.
While
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, the remaining four areas of the world only consume
water
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 at the lowest levels, ranging from 5% to 12%.
Lastly
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, South
America
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,
Europe
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, and North
America
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 continue to rank first for domestic purposes, with 19%, 15%, and 13%, respectively. Central and Southeast
Asia
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 had an equal percentage of 7%. In conclusion, agriculture is the largest consumer of
water
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 in Central
Asia
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, Africa, Southern
Asia
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, and South
America
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,
whereas
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 industry consumes more
water
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 than either of the two sectors in
Europe
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 and North
America
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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