It has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books. “Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

Nowadays, many people think that
knowledge
from books is less necessary
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the
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knowledge
which was taken from
experience
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the experience
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essay will agree with the given statement because it presents practice for a person and
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a significant role in life.
Furthermore
,
knowledge
is often unique for people, and it can't be taken from books. On the one hand, experience is better because people can use it daily for different tasks. Folk need them because it is basic
knowledge
for individuals, even though they can be written in books.
For example
, most of our
knowledge
about the World is
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To fully achieve the task response, complete your argument with more thorough examples and reflections on both book and experiential knowledge and their roles in life.
coherence cohesion
Include a conclusion to summarize your key points and to restate your opinion more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Find more balance by developing the argument for the importance of book learning alongside experiential learning, strengthening coherence.
task response
The essay presents a clear viewpoint relating to the preference of experiential knowledge over book knowledge, which is a strong start.
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The essay uses expression like 'practice for a person,' which begins to explore personal insight into the topic.
coherence cohesion
The beginning of the essay successfully introduces the main topic and your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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