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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph indicates the proportion of the results of buying and drinking
coffee
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 and tea in five different cities in Australia in the
last
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 4 weeks. From an
overall
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 view, it is obvious that the least consumption of fresh
coffee
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 was in Sydney and instant
coffee
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 was used in both Briston and Adelaide,though, the most consumption of
coffee
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 and tea that
people
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 went to a cafe in Melbourne. On one hand,
people
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 bought net
coffee
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 for about 34 per
cent
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 in Brisbane and Adelaide for the
last
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 4 weeks;
however
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, the most consuming net
coffee
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 was in Sydney around 43 per
cent
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 and Melbourne with approximately 42 per
cent
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.
Furthermore
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,
people
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 in Brisbon and Hobart bought the most amount of instant
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks around 53 per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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,It can be seen that
people
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 prefer to go to cafes to buy and drink
coffee
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 and tea, which was the least consumed by Adelaide approximately 54 per
cent
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 and the most were in
Melburne
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Melbourne
 about 63 per
cent
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, people, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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