Some people believe that every human can create art. Other people think that art can only be created by people with special talents. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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pressing issues in modern society is
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the
art
of creation. Some
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which
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is
art
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by
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, another opinion
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the number of
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who are talents and
art
can only be created by
people
. To my mind, I think
this
is a partially positive trend and
art
preserves our culture and tradition. From an
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perspective
, there are two main reasons why
people
think that
art
gives meaning to life
while
art
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, us from
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an animal
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animal
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. The primary argument supporting
this
idea is that
art
brings out the hidden creativity of children like drawing and painting. A good illustration of
this
is that
people
can convey their
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through their paintings.
As a result
, the number of
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who are
talents
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art
.
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Art
is from of
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communication
which is
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important way to
people
. It
is
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not only
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special talents, it
also
presserve
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preserve
preserves
our culture and tradition.
On the other hand
, there are several
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decision
decisions
against that every human can
crate
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create
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art
.
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Firstly
, some
person
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people
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like
art
but some
person
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people
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dislike
art
.
Secondly
, Some
people
think that
art
is
waste
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of time. A
furthure
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further
argument for the
art
of creation is not possible
every
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human.
This
is because every person has
choosen
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chosen
their aim. I am not only thinking of
atistic
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artistic
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works produced by renowned artists, but
also
those produced by children for their parents to attach to refrigerators using magnets.
To sum up
,
art
is not just for entertainment.
However
, I feel that the best way to
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this
issue is connecting
people
to each other and to their culture, making them rich and
also
relaxing them. If the government
art
implements
this
policy, it will provide a better life for
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generation
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.
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