The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
The line graph compares the percentage of
population
in four countries from 1970 to 2020 and estimates its percentage in 2030 and 2040. Looking from an
overall
perspective, even though the initial number of Malaysians ranked
second,
it sharply increased and
also
will reach the highest total
population
among other countries in the future. Looking in more detail at Malaysia's and Indonesia's
population
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,
although
the rate of breeding in Indonesia was extremely low and ranked
last
in 1970, it remarkably surged over the assessed years.
In addition
, it is estimated that it will have an increasing trend in 2030 and 2040.
Moreover
, Malaysia's
population
had the same trend just as Indonesia's.
Nonetheless
, they differed in initial numbers. Malaysia ranked
second,
at 30%.
On the other hand
, the percentage of
population
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in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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and Thailand had a fluctuating pattern. After the rate of
population
in
Philippines
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soared at
the
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first,
it dramatically dropped in 2010, and
then
it is predicted that it will marginally increase. Despite the fact that Thailandians' number had an increasing trend throughout all years, it slightly remained constant at 30% over 30 years from 1990 to 2020.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second, ".
Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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