With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered area of the world should be opened up to access more resourced. To what extent do you agree?
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people
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are really
for
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to
world
. As a Add an article
the world
human
I agree that our harmful to natural habitats. We are insatiable Add a comma
human,
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to see Correct word choice
and easy
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. Because we always want to more
, if we get something that Add a missing verb
do more
useful
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is useful
our
generation or our Change preposition
to our
about
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apply
damaging
.
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are always getting worse about healthy life because we don'Fix the agreement mistake
beings
t
care about future
we just pay attention Correct article usage
the future
our
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to our
todays
. İf we have so many possess we don'Correct your spelling
today
t
worried
about ten years later. Oil and gas big Change the verb form
worry
resource
of money for countries especially big countries like Fix the agreement mistake
resources
U.S.A.
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the U.S.A.
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I genuine
genuine
love that.
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genuinely
for
instance, they kill Add the comma(s)
, for
people
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sources
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an important
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in
rich
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the rich
a rich
resource
. Nobody Fix the agreement mistake
resources
know
about Change the verb form
knows
there
places. Correct your spelling
their
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solution for learning what is Add an article
The only
happen
in rural areas Change the form of the verb
happening
we need
to go there and we have to research Verb problem
is
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contain
source
as Change to a plural noun
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result
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a result
of
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apply
people
aren't
live rural
areas mostly they are living Change preposition
in rural
metropolis
sides, that's why governments and Change preposition
in metropolis
business men
love to dig rural regions for their income. They Correct your spelling
businessmen
are
always ruin countryside fields Unnecessary verb
apply
due to
they do so many hole
and Change to a plural noun
holes
there
region Replace the word
their
become
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becomes
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a useless
the useless
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lives
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places
government
stay here or Correct article usage
the government
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people
that is
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a big
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the oil
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