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Full- time students should not spend a lot of time on studying, but the should be involved in other activities too. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#full- #time #students #activities
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The bar chart compares the
expenditure
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 of
France
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 and the
UK
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 on five categories of consumer goods in 2010, measured in sterling. In the category of cars, both countries spend around the same amount, but the
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Uk
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UK
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 spend slightly more than
France
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. The
UK
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's
expenditure
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 is just under 450,000 sterling,
while
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France
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's spending is approximately 400,000 sterling. For computers,
France
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spend
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 slightly more than the
UK
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, with
France
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 spending around 370,000 sterling and the
UK
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 just under 350,000 sterling. In the books category, the
UK
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 spend significantly more than
France
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. The
UK
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's
expenditure
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 is around 400,000 sterling,
while
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France
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spend
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 just under 300,000 sterling. Regarding perfume,
France
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 outspend the
UK
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 by a large margin.
France
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's
expenditure
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 is just under 200,000 sterling,
while
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 the
UK
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spend
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 nearly 150,000 sterling.
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, in the cameras category, the
UK
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 again spend slightly more than
France
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.The
UK
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's
expenditure
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 is just under 350,000 sterling,
whereas
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France
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spend
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 around 150,000 sterling. In summary,
while
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 the
UK
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 more on cars, books, and cameras,
France
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 led in spending on computers and perfume. The differences in
expenditure
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 are most notable in the books and cameras categories.
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Introduction & Conclusion
Consider introducing the topic at the beginning of your essay and summarizing your key findings at the end for better structure.
Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph flows smoothly into the next by using linking phrases.
Task Achievement
Though your analysis is strong, ensure each point is tied back to the overall comparison of expenditures and what it suggests.
Task Achievement
You have provided a comprehensive comparison between France and the UK for each category.
Task Achievement
Your essay clearly distinguishes which country spent more on each category and provides specific figures.
Logical Structure
The structure is logical, allowing the reader to follow each point easily.

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